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Ching-Hiu Chan

You did a very nice job on this blog. You guys clearly state out the specifics and also make all your points clear. Which makes you have a strong blog. However just a few minor errors. 1) is that in your intro you guys state that: " they probably have one thing on their minds: deciding your fate and determining how much longer you will be living. " I think you should rephrase that because what happens if the jury thinks your inncocent then they dont determine how much longer you will live. Maybe rephrasing it to the things that a jury think of if your guilty or not would be more understanding. 2) I think you have a lot of run-on sentences. They can be easily fixed, one easy way is to split the sentence into two sentences. Example : "In this case, Edward Rehberg was accused of severely beating and abusing her eleven year old daughter, Clara Rehberg, who died as a result of these beatings." You can change that to: In this case, Edward Rehberg was accused of severely beating and abusing his eleven year old daughter, Clara Rehberg. As a result to the beatings she later on died." 3) Another error is that you state MR. Edward rehberg as a she. Example :"abusing her eleven year old daughter," But they are just common mistakes that can be corrected by proofreading.

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